How to write the perfect opening sentence.

Posted on May 4, 2016 By

The first sentence of anything is every writer’s nightmare. Whether it’s a novel, an ad, a report, or a web page, the first line is always the hardest. You’re under pressure because, if the opening line doesn’t grab the reader, you might as well give up right there. So what’s the best way to hook your reader and keep them reading?

1. Make it easy to remember.

“Call me Ishmael.”
Herman Melville. Moby Dick

The shorter the sentence, the easier it is for the reader to remember. According to the American Press Association, total recall ends at about 8 words – and when a sentence reaches 20 words only 70% is memorable. So the advantage of a short sentence is that you can sink a powerful thought into the reader’s mind quickly.

If your first sentence rambles on, chances are you’ll cover more than one idea. Readers want to be led through arguments one thought at a time. The longer you waffle, the harder it is to follow. And your reader will wander off.

2. Make it human.

“There was no possibility of taking a walk that day.”
Charlotte Bronte, Jane Eyre

The other advantage of a short sentence is that it’s closer to the way we speak. Estimates vary, but a recent Ted talk put the average spoken sentence length between 7 -10 words. So the rhythm of a short sentence is something we feel familiar with. It eases us into the copy.

Everyday words help too. Partly because there’s no confusion, but also because they’re the words that are hardwired into our sub conscious and have more emotional impact: ‘beat’ will always carry more weight than ‘vanquish’.

In Charlotte Bronte’s opening to Jane Eyre the language is accessible and concrete. No trouble picturing someone trapped inside because of the weather.

Contrast that with Balfour Beattie’s opening to their About us page: Our diverse range of capabilities allows us to invest, design, deliver and operate infrastructure assets.

Can you picture an infrastructure asset? Thought not.          

3. Say something people agree with.

“It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune, must be in want of a wife.” Jane Austen. Pride and Prejudice

Door-to-door salesmen know that if they can get you to agree to one thing, you’re more likely to agree to the next. The sale can come later.

The same thing goes for copy. If your reader agrees with your first sentence, they’re more likely to read the next.

The first sentence of this post was written using that idea. And you’re still reading. What I love about Jane Austen’s line is that the truth is ‘universally acknowledged’ so it must be true.

Here’s the first sentence from the AA on their business breakdown insurance:

Keeping your fleet of cars, vans, trucks and other vehicles moving is crucial to a successful business.

Can’t argue with that. And note how they said ‘successful’ business, which of course is what we’d all like to be.

Or this truism from a Vodafone post:

The way we work has changed dramatically.

No disputing that either – and suddenly you’re reading the next sentence.

Other opening sentences are available from all good writers

There are plenty of other ways to start a piece of writing: intriguing, surprising, shocking, empowering, poetic and more. But for a guaranteed good start you can’t beat writing something you know your reader will agree with, delivered in a short, easy to grasp soundbite.

Your only remaining challenge? To make all the other sentences as good as the first.

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This post was written by Richard Spencer